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In some countries, health care is free, paid for by the sate. In other countries, payment is divided between the state and people themselves. Discuss both systems and say which one is better. Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays,
all
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the
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 population of the world becoming more
concernt
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concerned
concerns
 about their health. Some government claims that
treatment
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the treatment
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which
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apply
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given
for
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to
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 their residents should be free and paid
by
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for by
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 the government
themselves
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itself
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.
Nowever
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However
, in other countries, cost of the health care is
half
 paid by the government and another
half
 by
people
 who needed it and
i
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I
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 believe that
this
 system is more efficient. On the one hand, there are several benefits for residents to have free medical management like having equal
opritunity
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opportunity
 for everyone.
In other words
,
sociaty
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society
 would not be divided into two
group
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groups
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 like poor
people
 and wealthy individuals. So, the therapy which low-income families could not afford,
now
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is now
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 paid
by
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for by
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 the state and these
people
 have
chance
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a chance
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 to make sure about taking appropriate therapy without taking costs into account.
On the other hand
, the system of dividing payment is forecast to be successful for
economy
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the economy
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 of the country.
For instance
, if
state
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the state
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 will pay only
one
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one-half
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half
 of the care cost, another
half
they
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apply
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can invest
into
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in
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development
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the development
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 of the hospital.
These
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This
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 money is spent on
changind
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changing
 old
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 to
the
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apply
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brand-new ones with developed technology.
This
 means that individuals have a chance to have
high quality
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high-quality
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of
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apply
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the
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apply
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care, which
also
 leads to
rise
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a rise
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of
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in
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standard
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the standard
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 quality of living and
increase
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an increase
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elder
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in elder
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people
 passing approximately
at
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apply
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in their 70s and 80s.
To sum up
, these two systems of healthcare have
it’s
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its
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 own benefits for both
people
 and
state
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the state
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, but
i
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I
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 still believe that it is significant to divide payment.
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