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You nearly complete your trial work period of two months and desire to become an official employee in the company. Write an email to your manager: Saying why you deserve to pass the trial work period Explaining what benefits you are able to bring for the company if passed Explaining what skills you should improve Stating your long-term career goals if your have an opportunity to work in the company Try to write a minimum of 50 words.

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Dear Manager As I approach the completion of my two months trial work period. I wanted to take a moment to express my gratitude for the opportunity and share my thoughts on the experience so far. Throughout
this
 trial period, I have dedicated myself to understanding and aligning with the
company
's goal, culture and values. My commitment to learning and adapting has allowed me to quickly integrate into the team and continue effectively to our projects. I believe that my strong work ethic, attention to detail, and willingness to take on challenges demonstrate my dedication to becoming a valuable member of the team. If I have a
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 to become an official employee, I'll continue to bring benefits
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 the
company
 by using my skills, expertise and enthusiasm to every task and challenge. I'll
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 seek to improve my skills and learn new ones by taking advantage of the training and development opportunities that the
company
 offers. My long-term career goal is to become a software engineer and a leader. I'm passionate about creating and delivering innovative and reliable software solutions that can meet the expectations of our customers. I think that your
company
 is the perfect place for me to achieve
this
 goal, as it has a culture, vision and values that align with mine. Thank you for considering my request to continue as an official employee. I'm excited about the opportunity to contribute
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's continued success and growth. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Best Regards, Kha
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