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You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged.** **Write a letter to your friend. In the letter:** - **apologise for the damage to the item** - **explain what happened** - **say how you are going to fix the issue**

#friend #**write #**apologise #damage #item** #**explain #happened** #**say #issue**
I hope are things going well . I would like to say thank you for borrowing me the
dress
 to wear
in
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 my sister's wedding . It was the
awesome
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dress
 I have seen it I should apologize to you
due to
 the
dress
 you gave me has been damaged accidentally. Let me explain what happened that day . I put the
dress
 on my bed
during
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while
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 I took a shower unfortunately , my cat stayed on it so my cat tore a small part of
dress
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also
 he ate a button from the
dress
 I was extremely cautious about the
dress
 .
Therefore
 I am going to fix it as soon as possible. It might take 5 days to 10 days I
tohope
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hope
to hope
 finish it earliest to back it to you Many thanks again to you and I am completely sorry to you I hope
this
 never happens again in future Yours faithfully
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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