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The world of work is changing rapidly. Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Describe the possible causes and give suggestion on how people should prepare for work in the future.

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With the rapid advancements and globalization today, the working environment is changing very fast. One of the main reasons
people
 switch jobs nowadays is to get a salary hike or to
experment
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experience
 their success with more
technology oriented
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 roles. The working class must upskill
continuousely
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continuously
 to
keepup
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keep up
to
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 the changing job requirements in
todays
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 era by studying
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future developments carefully. In many organizations, to maximise profits, their employees are being sacked and
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 one employee ends up doing
work
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 of 3 or 4
people
.
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,
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salary increments have become restricted to single digits
while
 only the influential
people
 within the organizations end up eating all the profits leading to a toxic environment. For
this
 very
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 employees change
companys
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companies
 to get better salaries.
For example
, I am currently working with a multinational company and recently I have seen many of my seniors move to other companies for better
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 and pay.
This
 was because
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 they were not given the salary and position they deserved after many years of service.
Also
, there are some
people
 who change their roles to other fields out of curiosity for success.
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 we can see that most of the processes are being fully automated, which means technologies like
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Artificial
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intelligence
 will replace
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at least
 50% of the human workforce in the next two to three decades.
Therefore
, the working class today are required to carefully study the future job markets and
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 requirements and equip
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 with
skilles
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skills
 based on
this
 research.
For instance
, nowadays
a
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 engineering degree is not enough to land a job,
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employers demand
the
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 engineers
to
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also
 know all the latest related
softwares
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software
 to their field of study or work.
To sum up
, the citizens of the working world are changing jobs
continuousely
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continuously
 either to get
a
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better pay or to experiment
something
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 better for their future.
Also
, the need to work on professional
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development
 has never been so important as compared to today
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 the increasing tech
savy
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savvy
 demands of
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employers.
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