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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. what are the advantages and disadvanteges of such a solution?

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government
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the government
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 should impose heavy taxes on private car
owners
 in order to improve public transportation. There are numerous factors contributing towards it that solve traffic issues.
Now adays
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Nowadays
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 every private car
owners
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owner
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 wants to travel by own
transport
 creating a jigsaw puzzle all around. The congested roads with heavy traffic
disturbs
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 a
person
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 mental health.
To begin
 with plenty of benefits, it would allow people to reach destinations
with in
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within
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 less time than usual ultimately saving time as time is money.
Moreover
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 fuel prices are already cloud nine
due to
 increasing inflation at high rates. Public
transport
 will enable individuals to save money by less fuel consumption.
Consequently
, few cars on
road
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means
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 less number of accidents.
Additionally
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 public
transport
 creates a large amount of revenue being an economical source of a country. More people will prefer public vehicles so more money can be generated. Recently
Pakistan
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Pakistan's
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 mass transit authority launched
metro
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 bus project .The government generated huge income that encouraged
owners
 to promote
such
 projects
further
.
On the other hand
, it grants numerous disadvantages .When govt will
start
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 imposing
tax
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a tax
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 burden
every
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apply
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private car
owners
 will stop buying vehicles .
This
 particular industry will get adversely affected.
Moreover
, various contagious diseases might spread if
patient
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patients
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 travel in public
transport
 .
Therefore
 it will turn out to be a great mess.
However
 ,public
transport
do
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 consider every terminal
according to
 passengers but every person
do
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does
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 not
gets
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 benefited
due to
 remote areas
instead
 of stations.
Last
 but not least public
transport
 is not safe too. I do not agree
to
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with
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 the notion that govt should impose heavy taxes on private
transport
 .Though public
transport
 should be provided to the non-affording community.
On the other
hand
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 private cars should be encouraged simultaneously.
Instead
, restrict the number of cars to
owners
 to avoid congested traffic.
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