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You nearly complete your trial work period of two months and desire to become an official employee in the company. Write an email to your manager: Saying why you deserve to pass the trial work period Explaining what benefits you are able to bring for the company if passed Explaining what skills you should improve Stating your long-term career goals if your have an opportunity to work in the company Try to write a minimum of 50 words.

#work #period #two #months #desire #employee #company #email #manager #skills #career #goals #opportunity
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Dear
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 Kim, I would like to convey my gratitude as my
two-months
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 trial concludes. I've strived to consistently deliver quality
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, exhibit
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work
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 ethic, and embrace challenges. With a background in user experience, my
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 has met clients and supervisor's
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, and I'
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 confident in continuing to bring
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 positive and professional spirit to the team. My focus is on streamlining processes and leveraging my UI-UX to contribute effectively.
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pround
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proud
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 committed to enhancing my business mindset through targeted training. My long-term company goal is to bring out professional products to our clients, contributing to projects and growth. Thank you for the challenging but educational
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tria
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, I would be
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 to be considered for an official role in the upcoming review. I'
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 really
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excited
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 collaboration between us. Best regards, Chi
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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