You want to ask for a pay increase after a year working in your company because of your great contribution to your team. Write an email to the Human Resources Department: Saying why you deserve a pay rise Explaining what next benefits you are able to bring for your company Stating your long-term career goals of continuous cooperation in your company

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Dear Mr A, My name is Nguyen Duc Canh, I'm working as a technical leader. After a year working in your company, I have some issues that need to discuss with you. We need to check my salary, I want to you review and increase my salary
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year. There are results and benefits I think it's
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contribution to our company that I build a small team with 10-12 people and my
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always gets
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response from customers.
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year, I want to grow my team to around 15-16 people and receive new projects. You can help me review
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. Thank you so much!
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