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some people think that getting adegree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe it would be better to go straight to work and get experiance instead. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #adegree #university #guarantee #job #work #experiance
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university
 for obtaining a
degree
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good
job
.
On the other hand
, others
thinks
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to have
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having
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 a
job
 straight after school or during
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school is better so you have
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work
experience
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this
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 I will discuss why is important to
study
a
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for a
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degree
 in
university
for
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to
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 get the
job
 you would like and we will review why is important to have
work
experience
instaed
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instead
 to
study
a
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for a
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degree
. In my opinion, both
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 of
views
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are
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 accurate only depends what are the person's expectations in life and how they want to
fulfill
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they
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 life for some
people
job
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jobs
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such
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 make them happy so they just need to get
experience
 through life.
To begin
 with, some
jobs
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 positions only can
be obtain
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be obtained
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 if you go to
university
 and if you
study
in
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there.
Therefore
, when you
going
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 to
university
 you are increasing
you
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your
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 knowledge which can open doors in the
future
.
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in
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at
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university
 in some
case
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cases
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 can make you have the jobs you want in the
future
.
For example
, the employability
from
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of
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people
 coming from oxford
university
 is 95 % after the first year of
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.
People
thinks
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 to get a good
job
 you have to go to
university
.
However
, some jobs
not
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do not
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 require
to
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you to
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 go to
university
 to start working on them and you just get the
work
experience
 by working in them. Some
works
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such
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constructions
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 or plumbing or waitress you
not required
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did not require
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 a
degree
 to
work
 in there and sometimes
this
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these jobs
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job
 give you
experience
 and the money you need to
be want
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want
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 you
want
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to want
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 in the
future
.
For example
,
constructions
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construction
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 is
hand
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 on
career
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a career
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 which you only can learn by
experience
. In conclusion, some
people
thinks
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think
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 for gain a good
job
 you need to go to
university
 and other believe you just need to get
work
experience
 through the
job
. In
these
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this
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essay
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 we review both
point
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 of
views
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view
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. In my opinion, both are important and
depends
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depend
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of
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on
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 each individual what would like to do in the
future
 as
career
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a career
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.
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