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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph lays off the expenditure on three categories between different age groups of people in the United Kingdom in 2004.
Overall
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, the trend of expending resources for food and entertainment purposes is growing as people got older, meanwhile,the number of pennies used for dining and staying for a short time is decreasing.
First,
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adults whose age is under 30 are not into entertaining themselves. They only spend a bit over 6% of their money on it
while
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 they adore stopping by a restaurant or a hotel. They are the highest contributor in fine dining and staycations, hitting percentage a slightly lower than 15%.
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, older pupils aged 31 to 45 years old love dining and staying in hotels, paying about 13% of their wealth for them.
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, pupils who are between 61 to 75 years old tend to spend the least money on restaurants and hotels, reaching the number of only below 3%.
In contrast
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, elderly people older than 76 like spending their cash on eating and drinking. They expend between 23 to 24% of their wealth on accessing them.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Categories
  • Age groups
  • Residents
  • Summarize
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Spending habits
  • Life stages
  • Childcare costs
  • Healthcare costs
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Cultural factors
  • Leisure activities
  • Financial outlays
  • Demographics
  • Percentage
  • Allocation of funds
  • Consumption
  • Discretionary spending
  • Essential expenses
  • Generational differences
  • Income bracket
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