The following table shows the number of factory workers for a given time period in Germany.

The following table shows the number of factory workers for a given time period in Germany.
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The provided table depicts the
number
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of male and female employees of
factories
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and the
number
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of
factories
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in 1851, 1861, 1871, 1881, 1891 ,and 1901 in Germany. A glance at the table reveals that
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the
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of
factories
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almost tripled in 1871 from 227 to 622, the total
number
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of
workers
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dropped by around 50% from 291,780 to 140,123. In 1851, the
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of male
workers
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was almost one and a half times the
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of female
workers
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at 287,100 in 225
factories
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. In 1861,
while
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the
number
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of
factories
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rose by two, the total
employees
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declined to 291,780 ,and Interestingly,
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was the only year during the provided period that female
workers
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were higher in
number
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at 160,000. In 1871, despite the fact that the
number
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of
factories
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increased significantly from 227 to 622, the
number
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of female and male
workers
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decreased to 60,000 and 80,123 respectively. By 1881, Germany had 99 more
factories
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but, the total
number
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of
workers
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declined. In 1891, 65,000 men and 40,000 females were working in 625
factories
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. In the
last
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year of the given period, around a hundred people worked for each factory and the
number
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of males and females were almost the same at 31,000 and 30,000 respectively.
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