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The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Townsend in two years 1960 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Townsend in two years 1960 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts compare the workforce distribution in Townsend across three sections which are manufacturing, sales, and services from 1960 to 2010.
Overall
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, the workforce in both towns was less likely to work in sales-related jobs over the given period.
While
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 an increasing number of
workers
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 in
town
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 A worked in the services sector, the same allocation can be seen in the manufacturing section's employees in
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B
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. In 1960, the majority of total
workers
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 in both towns worked in manufacturing sections, at 41% and 70%, respectively. Over the course of 50 years, the percentage of manufacturing
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 in
town
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B
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 declined, accounting for 58%, which was 38% more than in
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 A.
Additionally
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, in
town
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 A, the number of
workers
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 in the services sector doubled from 29% in 1960 to 64% in 2010,
likewise
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, a similar pattern can be observed in
town
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B
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, which increased by roughly 15%. With regards to sales-related positions, the proportion of employees in
town
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 A experienced a downfall, from above a quarter to merely a fifth.
By contrast
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, in
town
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B
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, the number of sales
workers
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 in 2010 was twice as much as its figure in 1960.
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