The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.
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This
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given bar graph illustrates the percentage of different ways of spending the
househols'
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household'
wages in a particular land in two dissimilar years.
Overall
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,
while
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the largest fraction of weekly salaries went to the cost of doing leisure activities in 2018, families had spent the
bigest
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part of their wages on providing food in 1968.
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, a tiny fraction of households income
spent
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on fuel and power in
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this
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two years
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personal goods in 2018. The biggest amount of every
families
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family's
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wages went to buying
foods
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food
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in 1968 at 35%
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the most important expenditure for families was leisure after 50 years at approximately 20%.
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, the cost of housing and transport occupied the second and third rank among the figures which are related to 1968 at 18% and almost 15% respectively.
Aditionally
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, the second rank in 2018 belongs to housing costs and clothing
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and footware
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footware
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footwear
at 10% and the third rank is for
transportation's
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transportation
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expenditure at less than 10%.
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