The table below gives information on UK males’ and females’ average hours and minutes on different daily activities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on UK males’ and females’ average hours and minutes on different daily activities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates data about the amount of
time
per day that has been done by gender in several activities
such
as sleep, personal care, and sport in British. Looking at the information in more detail, both females and males dedicated more of their hours to sleep than other activities.
Also
, there are significant differences in the hour spent on housework and employment
,
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and study between
men
and female. On average, both genders spent well over 8 hours sleeping.
Also
, leisure activities take up the second longest proportion
such
as reading and sport with about 72
minutes
men
spent higher than
women
.
On the other hand
,
men
unexpectedly have just under 1.5 hours spend their
time
working and studying.
While
women
spend more than
this
time
on housework. It is noticeable that
women
spend 32
minutes
on childcare which is close to
this
time
for
men
, 15
minutes
per day.
By contrast
, male spends their day travelling just over 1 hour and 30
minutes
but
women
spend 1 hour and 22
minutes
on
this
activity.
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