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The table below gives information on UK males’ and females’ average hours and minutes on different daily activities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on UK males’ and females’ average hours and minutes on different daily activities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates data about the amount of
time
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 per day that has been done by gender in several activities
such
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 as sleep, personal care, and sport in British. Looking at the information in more detail, both females and males dedicated more of their hours to sleep than other activities.
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, there are significant differences in the hour spent on housework and employment
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 and study between
men
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 and female. On average, both genders spent well over 8 hours sleeping.
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, leisure activities take up the second longest proportion
such
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 as reading and sport with about 72
minutes
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men
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 spent higher than
women
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.
On the other hand
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,
men
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 unexpectedly have just under 1.5 hours spend their
time
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 working and studying.
While
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women
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 spend more than
this
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time
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 on housework. It is noticeable that
women
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 spend 32
minutes
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 on childcare which is close to
this
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time
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 for
men
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, 15
minutes
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 per day.
By contrast
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, male spends their day travelling just over 1 hour and 30
minutes
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 but
women
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 spend 1 hour and 22
minutes
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 on
this
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 activity.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, minutes, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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