The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The given maps illustrate how the town named Islip looked like in 1980 and how it was planned to be changed in 2005.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there were significant changes planned in order to develop the town,
such
as
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the
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elimination of the countryside and the location of industrial buildings and public
places
.
To begin
with, looking at the map of 1980, the major part of the North was taken by the countryside,
while
in 2005 it was proposed to eliminate
this
area and replace it with the dual carriageway road that will go around the residential district, industrial buildings and
places
of entertainment. There were two lines of
shops
in 1980,
however
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in 2005, it was suggested to establish a big shopping centre
instead
of one line of
shops
and to keep
shops
in the middle a bit larger in size. For safety, the pedestrian area was added, which makes it easier to access some
places
,
such
as bus stations, car parks and
shops
. In conclusion, the map in 2005 proposed ideas which make it easier for people to access
places
as well as
to use their own cars and public transportation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words places, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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