the chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the Uk in 2010

the chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the Uk in 2010
The bar chart illustrates how men and
women
teachers
take up in educational institutions of six different types in Britain in 2010.
It is clear that
women
teachers
in nurseries constituted a great majority of more than 95%, which was the largest among the amounts in all kinds of
schools
.
Similarly
, female
teachers
in primary
schools
also
occupied a large share at roughly 90%.
Conversely
, the proportion of
women
teachers
in universities was dramatically low (30%), which was only
one third
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of that in pre-
schools
and primary
schools
. It can be seen that
women
teachers
in secondary
schools
slightly outnumbered their counterparts, accounting for approximately 54%. The situation was just
opposite
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in private training institutes, where only around 46% of
teachers
were female. In terms of colleges, the percentage of
women
teachers
was exactly the same as that of men
teachers
.
To sum up
, there are
less
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women
teachers
as the educational setting
being
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higher.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, teachers, schools with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational settings
  • percentage
  • representation
  • disparities
  • predominance
  • gender imbalance
  • societal expectations
  • historical roles
  • implications
  • trends
  • gender gap
  • educational outcomes
  • gender stereotypes
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • perceptions
  • effectiveness
  • primary school
  • secondary school
  • nursery
  • university
  • further education
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