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the graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The provided bar chart illustrates information about the change in the percentage of
waste
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 recycled from 2000 to 2010, with data presented in five-year intervals in the percentage scale.The
waste
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 type
includ
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includes
 plastic, cans, paper,
metal
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and metal
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 .
Overall
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, the four kinds of
waste
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 recycled's percentage went up more than at the
begining
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beginning
 of the period. Significantly,
waste
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 of metal had the highest percentages
of
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apply
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among them. In 2000, at the start date of
survey
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the survey
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, almost
waste
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 of around 90
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percent
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per cent
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 of it was not recycled. Only 10
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percent
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per cent
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 was recycled.
However
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,the
waste
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recycled
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recycling
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 of metal
rate
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 was increased to 30
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2005. Compared to the previous survey year about tripled.
On the other hand
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, the recycled
rate
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 of cans
only
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is only
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 a little lower than
2005
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in 2005
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.That down
rate
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 was just about one or two
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percent
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per cent
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.
Although
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 the study started dates recycled only 10
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percent
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per cent
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,
four
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of four
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 kinds
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waste
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of waste
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recyceled
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recycled
 about 40
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2010. Metal recycling's
rate
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incresed
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increased
 to 40
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percent
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per cent
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 and cans
which
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apply
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rate
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 went down in 2005
dramaticly
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dramatically
 increased to 30
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percent
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per cent
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. Other
waste
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 went up : plastic and paper, about
25percent
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25 per cent
 and 29
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, percent, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Recycling rates
  • Type of waste
  • Decade
  • Increase / Decrease
  • Trends
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Significant change
  • Observation
  • Underlying factors
  • Technological influences
  • Environmental impact
  • Societal influence
  • Waste management policies
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