The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.

The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.
The provided bar chart information about the change in
UK
and international
pupils
gained
second
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class
degrees or better at a major
UK
university in 2009 , with data presented on a percentage scale.
Overall
, the
UK
students
the
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most population second
class
degrees or better were sociology .
However
, the international
pupils
were the most liked
class
of
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inforamtion
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information
technology. In detail.
UK
students
were not interested in
classes
of
inforamtion
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information
technology and electrical engineering , about 55%, and about 60% respectively.
However
, the
classes
were very
intertested
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interested
by international
pupils
, around 80% and about 83% respectively. And, the number of two types of
students
that gained second nursing and accountancy
classes
degrees or better was almost the same figure.
In addition
, the
classes
of international law ,
soiciology
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sociology
,
english
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literature and art history tended to
the
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UK
students
than
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more than
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international
students
.
Specially
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, the number of international law
class
learning the
UK
stdudents
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students
were
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higher than international
pupils
of
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gaining a degree and better, by about 20%.
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