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the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment?

#aim #science #people #lives #statment
Because there is a big development in science, Most
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people
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 that it should be beneficial for them in order to increase their life satisfaction. I am into that idea. At
first,
Scientists are the
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 who tried hard to find out the things that are unknown to us. They spend most of their time in the
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laboratory
 or in front of their lap taps to solve
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problems and theories. But, most of them are useless in our
regulary
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regular
regularly
 life.
Also
, not only they do not make a profit for non of us and even researchers, but
also
 it cost a lot for
government
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 to support their ideas and compliments them to improve their knowledge.
On the other hand
, many
people
 are against them despite it
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 benefits
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mankinds
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mankind
.
Although
, all the researches are important
but
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they
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 should be more likely to be done in our life.
FOR EXAMPLE
,
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GM foods
that
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are the final products of
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scientists who are been to make improve the variety and the quality of
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foods and vegetables. These ideas are being used
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all over the world and make a lot of financial benefits for the countries.
Moreover
, these developments can fulfill the
mankinds
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mankind
mankind's
 desires. In conclusion, scientists should be
garenteed
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guaranteed
people
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not only increase the
humans
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 knowledge
,
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 but
also
 pay attention
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people
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 needs.
That is
 why the government should be supportive and
guid
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guide
 them
to
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the
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 way
that is
 more applicable in
real
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 world.
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