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The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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Overall
, the detailed map
illustrate
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illustrates
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development
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the development
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 change
of
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in
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Change the capitalization
Islip
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the islip
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islip
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Islip
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town
 centre in Youngsville in New Zealand which took
a
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apply
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placed
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place
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 between 1980 to 2005 In 1980 majority of
town
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the town
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 was built on the middle portion of the map where
main
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the main
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Road
 was surrounded by shops and each side of the
road
had
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apply
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led to
school
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a school
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 and
the
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a
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 park with
housing
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a housing
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 facility on
South
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the South
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 side of the
town
.
However
,
the
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a
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 significant change
had
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apply
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occurred in 2005, with
totally
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a totally
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 overstating development of the
town
 centre, followed by
construction
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the construction
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 of
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway,
instead
 of
single
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a single
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 line, which would have covered approximately all the
facility
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facilities
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 and
amenity
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amenities
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 in the middle of the
town
.
In contrast
,
main
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the main
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road
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roads
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 have become pedestrian
way
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ways
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 only which would be
more
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a more
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 accessible option for people for their shopping.
Northern
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The northern
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 side of the shop had
demo
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a demo
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into
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of
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essential
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the essential
an essential
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facility
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facilities
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 of bus station shopping malls and car parking space for
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a resident
the resident
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resident
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residents
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 with a new housing space with
connection
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the connection
a connection
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of
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to
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main
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the main
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road
 , which can
be forgot
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be forgotten
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.
South
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The south
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map
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Map
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was
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was also accommodated
was also accommodating
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also
 accommodate with a new residential area but
park
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the park
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 has become smaller than it was before where is school have maintained
with
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apply
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access
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the access
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of
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to
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new
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the new
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 highway.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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