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should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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This
 table depicts the proportion of citizens who live in six countries
such
 as; Africa, Asia, Europe, Latin and North America,
Oceania
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and Oceania
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. It is clear from the graph that the rate of people who lived in the world
it
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increased
signific antly
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significantly
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 by 17
billions
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billion
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in totally
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totally
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total
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.
According to
 what is shown, from 1950 to 200 in Africa by 50 years the
infants
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infant
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 number has soared slightly around 4 %. On the opposite side,
the
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Asia contrary in 1950 was 56
percentage
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per cent
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 and in 2000 was jumped rapidly to 60. and Europe it was the only continent in the figure it decreased sharply
almost
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by almost
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 10%. Meanwhile, in the future after almost 30 years the Oceania continent will
remained
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remain
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 stable at 1%. And
the
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Latin America the rate will
increased
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increase
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 only 3
percentage
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per cent
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 compared with 1950. The biggest nations like Africa and
asia
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Asia
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 will
decreased
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decrease
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rocketly
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rocket
rocketry
 comparison with 100 years before it.
To sum up
, we could say that the Latin America the
number of
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population reaches around 24% and the upper part of
this
 country ranked generally 16 citizens.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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