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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show stages in the development of simple cooking equipment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show stages in the development of simple cooking equipment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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This
 diagram depicts the phases for one type of simple cooking equipment. It is clear from the graph that the development of
this
 cuisine tool passed through three stages.
According to
 what is shown,
the
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 first and second stages it is exceptionally easy to
made
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make
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it
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apply
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because
,
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apply
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 in
group
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 A the only thing we need
it
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apply
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to
cooking
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cook
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 the food
is only bring
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 hot stones and put them under the saucepan. Meanwhile,
in
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apply
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mindset class expresses about
small
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a small
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 clay shield that
burnin
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burnin'
it
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apply
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with fire in
the
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front of it until the
color
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colour
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 of the eat
be
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is
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 red.
On the other hand
, the latest development of equipment is defined as clay lining that
cover
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 it with
tow
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a tow
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 handle and tow pot the
beneficial
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 of it is
support
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 the clay and safety to use it. and inside of
this
tool
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,tool
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 it has
plate
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a plate
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 or grate for charcoal. The end of it has
strong
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a strong
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 structure
that
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apply
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made
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is made
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for
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of
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 metal that has
small
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a small
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 door
wich
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which
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 helps to enter the air
for
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to
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 balance the heat.
To sum up
, we could say that the first and second
category
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categories
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 it very
sample
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simple
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 to
made
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make
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 and use but the
last
 one
it
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apply
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is incredibly complex.
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