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Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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Some
companies
 require their
employees
 to wear
uniforms
 at all
times
. The advantages of
this
 are, it helps promote the
company
 and helps customers distinguish the roles of
staffs
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staff
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.
However
,
employees
 may find it difficult to wear
uniforms
 at all
times
 and most
company
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companies
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 do not provide enough sets of
uniforms
. Having staff wear
uniforms
 at all
times
 helps distinguish a
company
. It promotes a
company
’s identity to help customers differentiate it from other entities. Another benefit is that
companies
 can better classify their services by the type or
color
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colour
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 of
uniforms
 they wear which helps improve the customer experience.
For example
, in my hospital workplace, all patients are able to better distinguish which is a nurse or a doctor, because all nurses are only required to wear a blue scrub suit,
meanwhile
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 all doctors wear maroon scrub suits.
On the other hand
,
employees
 may find it uncomfortable to wear a uniform. Some
uniforms
 are uncomfortable and poorly fitted that it adds to an employee’s unhappiness. Another disadvantage is that most
companies
 do not provide enough
uniforms
 for their
employees
. It becomes a financial burden for the employee because he may need to purchase a new set of
uniform
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uniforms
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.
For example
, my brother who works twelve hours a day and six days a week, paid two thousand pesos to a local tailor just to make him three sets of
custom fit
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uniforms
 because his employer only gave him two sets. In conclusion, having a staff
to
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apply
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wear
uniforms
 at all
times
 is a great way to promote a
company
 and helps their customers distinguish their
employees
.
On the other hand
,
employees
 may find it distracting to wear a uniform and
companies
 may pass the burden of expense to their staff to buy extra
uniforms
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniforms
  • staff
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • promotes
  • belonging
  • team spirit
  • professional
  • cohesive
  • image
  • security
  • identification
  • reduces
  • expenses
  • employees
  • decide
  • wear
  • fosters
  • equality
  • minimizes
  • differences
  • individuality
  • self-expression
  • uncomfortable
  • restrictive
  • body types
  • sizes
  • maintenance
  • cleanliness
  • control
  • restriction
  • personal style
  • fashion preferences
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