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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Many people think that it is better to buy their home rather than rent it

In certain
part
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 of the world,
people
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 prefer to buy a
home
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 rather than rent it. I
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inclined to believe that owning a place to live in is the most important part of
life
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. Purchasing a house is
such
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 a big deal for every
people
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 because they have to
splend
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spend
 a high amount of money
with
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 it, some
people
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 have to collect their money
almost
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of
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their
life
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 to get it. So it
mean
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 that they have to be ready for it and
well considered
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 before having
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decision. Nowadays,
people
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 in the new generation have more resources to learn about investment or financial
plan
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plans
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, most of them have planned their step of
life
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 and set
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a goal
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goal
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 to reach
it
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so buying or renting a house will be set on the plan but
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 not mean that
every
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every one
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 of them will do the same. For individuals,
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, there seem to be clear positive benefits to owning your
home
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. But
overall
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, I feel there are considerable downsides, both for individuals and for society as a whole. For most
people
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, buying property requires taking out a mortgage, typically for a length of 25 years, and if at any time during
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period
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 borrowers are unable to maintain mortgage payments, they risk losing their property. For society as a
whole
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 there are
also
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 negatives. The demand for buying property leads to house price inflation, which can mean
people
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 on low incomes,
such
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 as young
people
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, can find it impossible to buy their own
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home
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, forcing them to rent. In sum, from my perspective, I agree with the notion that possessing a
home
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 is more crucial than renting an apartment because the more you grow up, the more you desire to have happiness,
comfortability
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, and security in your
life
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • property ladder
  • mortgage
  • rental agreement
  • down payment
  • equity
  • appreciate
  • rental market
  • monthly installments
  • credit score
  • repairs and maintenance
  • landlord
  • tenant
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