n increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why do people have operations to change the way they look? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, there can be seen a rising trend of having surgery to enhance the outer look of individuals.
This
can be
due to
the set
beauty
standards, made by social
media
and numerous commercialization done by
makeup
industries. I believe that
this
can put dramatic effects on humans, making them feel uncomfortable, about their natural
beauty
.
The social
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media
and
beauty
bloggers have set high
beauty
standards that give inferiority complex to
people
.
Moreover
,
beauty
industries have gone crazy for selling their goods and services by putting up enormous advertisements to attract
people
.
Also
, there is a trend that has been set on social
media
having
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pointed
nose
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noses
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and bold lips that
makeup
surgeries made possible.
For example
, botox was the famous surgery for having bold lips, so
the
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girls with small lips go for it.
Consequently
, it became a trend, and
people
that were conscious about their looks to got it done.
Furthermore
, there are fewer
people
that praise the natural
beauty
of
one
,
whereas
, more
people
who follow the trends without thinking that it is going to suit them or not.
On the other hand
, our natural
beauty
is the uniqueness
that is
gifted to us by God. I firmly believe that appreciating
one
's simplicity and
beauty
are
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more essential rather than persuading them to have
makeup
abscission.
Also
, if
one
is having self-confidence in himself
then
no
one
can make them feel uncomfortable about their looks. We should tell
ourself
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that we are perfect and beautiful, rather than listening to other
makeup
influencers and surgeons. As they are only promoting their business without the concerns that our faces can
also
be destroyed by
the
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failed surgeries. In conclusion, the main reason
to
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this
can be the numerous advertisements that are done by
makeup
industries and the set
beauty
standards on social
media
by
beauty
bloggers and
makeup
artists. I firmly believe that it can have
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impacts
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impact
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on society making individuals feel more insecure and doubtful about their natural
beauty
, which can cause more self-depreciation and stress among youngsters.
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