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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. Why? Effects on society?

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It is a worldwide phenomenon that
science
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subjects
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 are not preferable among
students
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 in universities. Despite nature-related studies being deeper and more sensible than others,
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 learners find it difficult and boring to learn and they hardly choose these
subjects
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 to continue for their academic careers. In return, because very few
people
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 go with life sciences, the
level
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 of development and discoveries decrease day-by-day and in the
future
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 improvements will stop and society will weaken. The number of young
people
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 who pursue their
future
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 career occupation related to
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 knowledge decreased
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these days. Many
students
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 find it hard to master
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science
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subjects
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 and
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most of the audience of these programs think that these meaningful fields are uninteresting. Nowadays, most
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 try to move away from toughness
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and focus on the easiest ways.
It is clear that
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science
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 topics are complicated and need complete dedication for improvements and good results. So,
people
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 do not find any incentive and do not see any perspective for them in the life sciences.
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, insufficient levels of
students
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 are observed in the classes of these programs in universities in the
last
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 years.
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 the surveys conducted by several countries suggest that every
year
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 the number of
students
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 who apply for nature
subjects
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 decreases by 10
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.
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 statistic indicates that the pattern rises and expands
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 by
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.
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 of the
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level
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interest
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 in natural topics and programs, society tends to progress more slowly every
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, and in
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 there will be a point when the public will stop any advancements
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 and
instead
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 will begin the process of collapsing. The reason is that
people
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 will stop to discover
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nature and
science
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 and
also
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 will cease to raise the
standart
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standard
 of life and its quality. The community will no longer contribute to any development, and
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 abovementioned process will occur. One research illustrates that the low
level
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 of contribution by scientists has already affected the economy and major countries in the world and is expected to impact more in the
future
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.
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, the arduous nature of
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subjects
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 and the lack of
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 interest in these matters created a noteworthy issue for the world, and the effect of
this
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 problem on the general public is a gradual decrease in the
level
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 of development and innovation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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