The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The given bar chart explains the
exports
performed in 2015 and 2016 of different products within a nation.
Similarly
, the table illustrates the
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change
in
exports
of
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2016 as
compare
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to 2015.
Overall
, we observe in 2016 the export of every item remained high as that of 2015, except for Gems and jewellery, which was slightly above in 2015 than
2016’s
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exports
.
To begin
with, we see that the petroleum products
as well as
the engineered goods is showing almost a similar trend i.e., there is an export of almost 60 billion dollar for both of them.
Furthermore
,
the
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agricultural products alongside textiles
also
gives
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us
same
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pattern. For both
the
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years a total of nearly $30 billion
exports
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were done.
In addition
to that, if we have a look at the table we conclude that
,
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the percentage
change
for
agricultural
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the agricultural
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product
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products
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for both years remained
lowest
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the lowest
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(0.81%).
In contrast
, in
textiles
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the textiles
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category
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the
change
was highest recorded at 15.24%.
Nevertheless
, in 2015–2016, the proportional
change
for petroleum was 3%, for engineered
good
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goods
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, it was 8.5% and
lastly
, for gems variation was 5.18%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, change with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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