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In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what action can be taken to solve this problem

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Undoubtedly, it is true that
traffic
 congestion is a concerning issue in cities and towns around the world. In
this
 essay, I discuss
about
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the possible reasons behind
this
 ever-rising problem and how can be tackled in an effective way. Definitely, the first and foremost for the
traffic
 jam is the increasing number of vehicles on the
road
. Nowadays, most
of
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the
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commuters
relay
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 on their own cars to reach their destinations. They think that it would save their precious time,
unfortunately
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 it makes congested roads. In order to resolve
this
 matter, the government has to implement frequent public transport
system
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systems
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 at reasonable cost at
anytime
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 and anywhere.
For example
, the government
introducesthe
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introduces the
 train which helps people to travel anywhere in the state .
It's
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 name is Vandhe Barath which saves time to travel long distances. The second reason for the
traffic
 congestion is the neverending
road
works
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 which makes the queues of vehicles on the
road
. In Kochi, one of the busiest cities in India, construction of flyovers,
pipe line
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 installation etc do at peak hours,
as
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 a result, it leads to
traffic
 jams. The best solution for
this
 problem is that
works
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 on the
road
 should be done at non-peak hours and travellers should
be notify
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 in advance.
Such
 ways help to reduce the intensity of
traffic
 block In conclusion,
traffic
 congestion is an ever-rising concern in major cities
due to
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 number of vehicles and
road
works
, it should
be handle
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 with possible solutions like
introduction
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 of more public transport and less busy hours
road
works
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • congested
  • infrastructure
  • public transportation
  • economic growth
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • congestion charges
  • cycling infrastructure
  • traffic management
  • eco-friendly
  • optimization
  • alternative routes
  • commuting
  • vehicle emissions
  • mass transit
  • urban planning
  • zoning regulations
  • sustainable development
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