in many countries have severe problems with students behaviour what do you this are the cause of this what solution can you suggest

Schools all over the world are facing problems with their
students
misbehaving in classes and around
school
campuses. I think the main reason behind
this
could be
due to
their family background, illicit drug usage and some may be having problems like developmental issues. In the following ,paragraphs I will explain more on
this
topic. To start with usually
students
portray their background story via manners.
Students
come to class late, doing all nonsense making it noisy. They will not do work on time but rather bunks the class failing their subjects.
This
is because, their
parents
are divorced or under peer pressure,
for
instance
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a child of separated
parents
is under the influence of drugs, and there are chances his friends would
also
join him to accompany exploiting not just himself but
also
his peers. Some ill-mannered
students
are those with mental retardation. It is seen that most of the developing countries don’t have different
school
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for these challenged kids. Rather they are sent to the same
school
of
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those who are doing well.
However
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by those
students
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many good
students
get spoiled
due to
their influence. In order to curb
this
problem in all schools every responsible people and agent should be involved including teachers,
parents
, peer groups, counsellors and even government officials. Teachers are the most important person to bring
on
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the discussion table to make changes. They are holding
parents-teacher
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meeting
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regularly,
talks
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with a peer
group
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groups
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,
informing
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counsellors about the student's behavioural records to plan their lessons,
finally
politicians will bring policy changes on these issues,
for example
building separate schools for mentally challenged children so that these people get education separately. In conclusion, the rising number of ill manned
students
in
the
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school
is not just numbers; it is raising concern for
parents
, teachers and the nation as a whole.
Therefore
any possible measures need to be taken to solve the issues.
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