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in many countries have severe problems with students behaviour what do you this are the cause of this what solution can you suggest

#countries #students #behaviour
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Schools all over the world are facing problems with their
students
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 misbehaving in classes and around
school
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 campuses. I think the main reason behind
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 could be
due to
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 their family background, illicit drug usage and some may be having problems like developmental issues. In the following ,paragraphs I will explain more on
this
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 topic. To start with usually
students
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 portray their background story via manners.
Students
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 come to class late, doing all nonsense making it noisy. They will not do work on time but rather bunks the class failing their subjects.
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 is because, their
parents
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 are divorced or under peer pressure,
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instance
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 a child of separated
parents
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 is under the influence of drugs, and there are chances his friends would
also
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 join him to accompany exploiting not just himself but
also
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 his peers. Some ill-mannered
students
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 are those with mental retardation. It is seen that most of the developing countries don’t have different
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school
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schools
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 for these challenged kids. Rather they are sent to the same
school
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of
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 those who are doing well.
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However
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 by those
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students
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 many good
students
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 get spoiled
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 their influence. In order to curb
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 problem in all schools every responsible people and agent should be involved including teachers,
parents
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, peer groups, counsellors and even government officials. Teachers are the most important person to bring
on
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 the discussion table to make changes. They are holding
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parents-teacher
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parent-teacher
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meeting
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meetings
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 regularly,
talks
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talking
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 with a peer
group
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groups
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,
informing
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and informing
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 counsellors about the student's behavioural records to plan their lessons,
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 politicians will bring policy changes on these issues,
for example
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 building separate schools for mentally challenged children so that these people get education separately. In conclusion, the rising number of ill manned
students
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 in
the
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school
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 is not just numbers; it is raising concern for
parents
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, teachers and the nation as a whole.
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 any possible measures need to be taken to solve the issues.
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