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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given illustration depicts the rate of residences in possessed and rented
settlements
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 in two countries from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
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, even though owned
houses
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 started the
period
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 as lowest in 1918, it experienced a steady ascending trend until the end of the
period
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while
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 the ratio of rented accommodation showed a constant decrease though it started as highest at the beginning of the
period
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. As can be seen from the depiction, the rate of owned
houses
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 began the
period
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 with almost 23% at the bottom
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rented accommodation was at the top with nearly 80%.
However
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, the percentage of the owned
settlements
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 had a gradual downward tendency ending the
period
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 with approximately 45% whilst the
proportion
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 of rented
houses
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 stably uplifted throughout the
period
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, finishing at around 65%. It can be clearly observed that the
proportion
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 of residences in rented
settlements
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 declined
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 10% between 1918-1930.
Although
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 the
proportion
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 remained the same for a decade, it moderately went down until the year 2001. It climbed 10% when the graph reached the end of the
period
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 in 2011. In the meantime, the
proportion
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 of households in owned accommodation progressively experienced improvements and overlapped with the percentages of
houses
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 in rented
settlements
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 in the year 1971 at 50%. Afterwards, it continued its gradual upward trend by reaching 70% in 2001. It slightly decreased to just around 65%
at the end
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 of the
period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words settlements, houses, period, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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