The charts below show the propo时ions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the propo时ions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The pie charts compare the ability to speak different types of
languages
in
British
students
, which include French, German,
Spanish
and others in the years 2000 and 2010. It is noticeable that
students
who didn’t speak any other
language
were the main group, and the least
students
group spoke two other
languages
.
Also
, it’s clear to see
Spanish
was the most common other
language
that
students
are able to speak in 2000,
however
, it become the least common
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to French and German in 2010. About one-third of the
students
didn’t speak any other
languages
, it’s around 30% and 35% of
students
in 2000 and 2010 respectively. And there is a 5% increase in the group with no other
language
speaking. For
students
who have the ability to speak two other
languages
, the percentage of
British
students
didn’t
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2000 and 2010, which is 10%. And it’s detectable to see, in 2000
Spanish
was the primary
language
apart from English spoken by
British
students
, but in 2010 there was another
language
becomes the most common other
language
among
British
students
. There is a visible fall in
Spanish
and French
languages
spoken by UK
students
from 2000 to 2010, in the
Spanish
language
it fell from 20% to 10%, which is the most obvious decrease, and in French ,
language
it fell by 5 % from 15% to 10%.
However
, two other
languages
spoken and another
language
spoken saw a 5% increase in both of them.
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