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t Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their house rather than rent it. Do you agree this statement or not?

#people #house #rent
Nowadays, some people hold the opinion of stay
their
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house
are
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 better than stay someone’s
house
. So, I suggest
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agreeing
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agree
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this
 statement. So
firstly
, when you buy a
house
, the
house
 will be under your personal ownership, you can do whatever you want,
you
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and you
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 can decorate the
house
according to
 your personal taste. You won't have to worry about rent every month, you only need to spend on food and daily living expenses. Another thing is that if you have damaged furniture in your
home
, you do not need to pay for it, you
also
 need to repair or buy those things back. When you are in your own
home
, you will feel much more comfortable renting a
house
 because you can do what you want and enjoy without being banned or restricted from those activities
while
 in your own
home
.
Secondly
, renting a
house
 is a very inconvenient thing because we have to live in a
house
that is
 quite small in size, we
also
 have to pay a lot of expenses
such
 as rent, electricity, water and personal living expenses, The amount per month is
also
 quite large. Many times when paying the rent late, the landlord will come up and say bad words and not good. If you damage furniture in the
house
, you will have to compensate for the amount
that
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 can be 2 and 3 times the normal price.
Thus
, it can be seen that
,
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 we should buy a
house
 for ourselves so we will live more comfortably, be able to do the things we like in our
home
, do not need to worry about the money each month.
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