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Now a days, many families are rarely having meals together. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or a negative development.

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To make a positive environment at home and to build strong bonds family should eat together. But in
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proper food together. In
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, people forget to eat because of their hectic schedule and they don't have
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 for their family members to
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 daily chores of their work. For
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instance, if a person is working late at night and not having to sit freely and talk to their loved ones,
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 it is very sad to see
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 as it's a negative development of his/her character.
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family everyone has to build a bond in
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the rest of the family members are there to support. To do
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 they have to spend some
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 together and have a meal together one day at a
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 can do
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, if one is suffering from depression, he can come out from it, if he talks to his family members and shares his problems. In conclusion, to have a good
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 in a day and rely on someone, one should spend more
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 with family and having a meal together in a day can do that.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern lifestyles
  • Busy schedules
  • Family dynamics
  • Individual activities
  • Convenience culture
  • Distracted dining
  • Cultural shifts
  • Family bonding
  • Communication breakdown
  • Home-cooked meals
  • Independence
  • Adapting traditions
  • Societal expectations
  • Nutritional wellbeing
  • Mealtime interactions
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