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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the correlation between
crime
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 and age group and the pie chart depicts the
crime
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 rates broken down into four types (violent
crime
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, property
crime
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, drug
crime
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, and public order
crime
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). Both graphics present information about
crime
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 data in the United Kingdom in the previous year.
Overall
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. the highest figure for criminals was between the people aged 12 to 28 which shows a serious problem with following the law in
this
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 age group,
while
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 the least number was for the under 8 years old group. the majority of
crimes
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 were violent
crimes
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 and the smallest segment was for public order
crimes
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. The peak of
crimes
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 went to the people in their 20s with around 800000
crimes
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,
while
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 people between 44 and 64 years old did under than 100000
crimes
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last
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 year.
Moreover
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, kids under 8 years old have no
crime
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 record at all. Most Of the
crimes
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 were violent by type at 46% of the total rate, followed by property
crime
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. drug
crime
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 with 23% and 22% respectively,
while
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 the least percentage of
crimes
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 went to the public order
crime
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 type with only 9% segment.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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