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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that’s why the use of public transportation is encouraged. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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 some
people
tends
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 to like to commute in their private
vehicle
whereas
 other
belives
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 that
use
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the use
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 of too
much
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many
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 private
vehicle
 contributes
in
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major
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a major
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 case of traffic congestion and road accidents.
Hence
, public
transportation
 should be promoted. In my point of view Thare many advantages and
disavantages
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disadvantages
 of using public transport.
This
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further
 discuss both. On the
on
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 side ,
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the firts
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firts
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first
 and foremost benefit is public
transportaion
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transportation
 is cheaper than
private
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the private
a private
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car
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cars
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. To exemplify ,
car
 maintenance is higher than public
travel
 ,
also
ticket
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tickets
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of
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for
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 buses and trains are
also
 less than
price
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the price
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 of fuel for
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the car
a car
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car
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cars
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.
Moreover
, buses and trains are
enviornment
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environment
friendly . For
an
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apply
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example,
car
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cars
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 and other private
vehicle
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vehicles
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 release
higher
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a higher
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amount
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amounts
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 of carbon
emission
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emissions
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therefor
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therefore
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 if
people
 choose to
travel
 by bus there is less air pollution. Other than that it
hepls
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helps
 to reduce traffic congestion and road accident . if
large
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 amount of
people
travel
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 by train or bus
issue
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the issue
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 of traffic
jam
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jams
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 will decrease. On the
othe
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other
 hand , there are several drawbacks of public
transportation
.
Firstly
 public services are insecure . Every occupation and
diffrent
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different
people
travel
 by bus or train
than
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then
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 there is a high chance of pickpocketing and bad behaviour in
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the vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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. To clear that , in India reports
shows
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 that major cases of theft and assaults are from public
transportation
. Another point is public
transportation
 is
unrealiable
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unreliable
. trains and buses are always
being
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late
thus
 students and
employee
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employees
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 often get late for their work and important exam.
Car
 owner can
enjoys
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 the journey and he can go
whereever
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wherever
where ever
 he wants without worrying time of
train
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the train
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. To
summerise
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summarise
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, there are numerous benefits
however
 there
is
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are
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 certain drawbacks of
uing
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using
 public
transportation
. I believe
people
 have
right
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the right
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 to choose if they want to
travel
 by their
oen
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own
vehicle
 or public transport .
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