nowdays, more teenagers want to become famous actors or singers. why do you think this is happening? is this a positive or negative development?
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people
want to be famous with the development of social media
. becoming famous is easy to gain. Hower
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people
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known
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sometimes
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a negative development.
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using
media
so much on a daily routine. So many videoes
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videos
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are
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uploaded
media
like:
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people
make
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an idol
idol
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idols
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show their personality to attract followers or they Change the adjective
comfortably
performance
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perform
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. Or even they can post a daily routine and many like Correct your spelling
talented
talent
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have
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do have
luckily
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badly
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posts
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makes
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a million
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are
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an
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enormous
critizm
from many Correct your spelling
criticism
critics
people
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apologetically
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be better and receive Fix the infinitive
apply
many
sympathy from everyone. Correct quantifier usage
much
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repeats
make
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makes
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the community
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problems
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train
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are
in
the internet. they put up with Change preposition
on
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end up with their life.
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