The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
These two pie graphs illustrate the information about children's
activities
. The first figure shows the cultural activities
that boys
like the most, while
the second graph presents the cultural and leisure activities
that girls
do.
However
, it is clear that
the girls
like to do outdoor games in their leisure time as well as
indoor activities
, while
the boys
are more interested in the outdoors than indoors. The percentage of boys
who like to read is the lowest amount shown by the pie chart at 2%, whereas
21% of girls
like reading.
Moreover
, the percentage of children who listening music is the same on both two sides at 10%. Although
both girls
and boys
are interested in computer games.
Although
,
only Remove the comma
apply
boys
play skateboarding, soccer and basketball, nevertheless
netball, gymnastic, and dancing are only famous among girls
. Most girls
choose dancing as the
cultural and leisure activity at 27%. Correct article usage
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On the other hand
, 26% of boys
play basketball.Submitted by skn on
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