The chart below shows the results of a survey that sampled a cross section of travelers at a major metropolitan airport about the purpose of their trip. The survey was carried out during four different months in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey that sampled a cross section of travelers at a major metropolitan airport about the purpose of their trip. The survey was carried out during four different months in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares the
the
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results of
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a survey
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that sampled a
cross section
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of
travelers
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at
major
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the major
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metropolitan
airport
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airports
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about the purpose of their trip, the survey was carried
for
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the months of
March
, June, September, and December in the year 2002.
It is clear that
the highest percentage of travelling
reason
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was for Business purposes in the month of
March
2022.
By
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the lowest percentage of
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the reason
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for travelling was Other, which was
also
in
March
2022. In 2022
March
and September the main
reason
for travelling at major metropolitan
airport
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airports
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were 73% & 53% respectively.
Holiday
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was
second
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most travelling
reason
in the months of June and December at 54% and 35%.
Visting
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family was not the main
reason
.
However
, the greatest percentage by far 26% of people visiting family did so in December 2002.
While
the Other category was fairly stable throughout the year at between 3% and 5%.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words march, reason with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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