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The chart below shows the Japan's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including forecast to 2040.

The chart below shows the Japan's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including forecast to 2040.
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The presented chart provides information about the population of Japan
according to
age
 classification between the years 1960 and 2040.
Overall
, the proportions of the 0-14 and 25-64 years old groups decreased over the
period
,
whereas
 the indicator for people who are 65 or more than 65 years old increased from 1960 to 2040.
To begin
, at the beginning of the
period
 the
age
 class of between 0-14 ages was equal to approximately a quarter of the total population, during the 1960 and 1970 the figure rose to about 35%, after 1970 the rate for
this
age
 group started to decline and in 2020 amounted to well below the 20%. The pattern of reduction in proportion is expected to continue till 2040 and will constitute 10%. The percentage of the 25-64
age
 group was 65% in 1960
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 and rose to 70% in 1970,
however
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 the figure fluctuated over the
period
 and amounted to 60% in 2020. The forecast for the future shows that in 2040 the proportion will be equal to just under 60%. At the start of the
period
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 the number of people
at
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the
age
 of 65 or more
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 the total
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 population was around 5% . The indicator increased year-by-year and climbed to 30%. It is expected that the rate of the 65+
age
 group will reach slightly less than 35%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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