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The bar chart illustrates percentage of unoccupied women in all 4 countries of the UK between 2013 and 2014.

The bar chart illustrates percentage of unoccupied women in all 4 countries of the UK between 2013 and 2014.
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 of unoccupied women in all 4 countries of the UK between 2013 and 2014. It is evident from the chart that most of the countries experienced a downfall. Despite
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, Scotland was the only country to have any sort of growth. In 2013 unemployment
rate
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 for Wales and Northern Ireland was approximately at the same level -5.4 and 5.6
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. By 2014, Northern Ireland had faced a decrease, going down to the point of 4.6
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, which in comparison with Wales, with its
rate
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 of 5.0
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, is a quite noticeable change. In terms of unemployment in England, the initial
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 was pretty high – 6.8
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. After
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 it had a slight downgrade to 6.5
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 in 2014, which is only 0.2
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lower than the final
rate
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 in Scotland in 2014, which was estimated
6.7
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at 6.7
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