The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the countries (
China
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, United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and the Korean Republic) rank in the number of manufacturers and uses of current in the year 2014.
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, the figure for total uses and construction lines used by
China
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in 2014.
Then
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after, the United States stand in the second most manufacture and utilization of energy.
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, Korea is the
last
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country in the chart for the manufactures and uses of power.
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,
China
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stands at the top of heat management and use which are 5,396 and 5,322 respectively.
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after, the United States stand in second most produced and consume current about 4,099 and 3,866. After that, many nations come into the graph for the manufacture and expenditure of light.
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,many kingdoms stand in the graph after that like(Japan,India,Canada,France and Brazil) for the making and expending of the current.
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, two major nations stand in after that which are Germany and Korea their making and expenditure rate is almost few in comparison to
China
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and the United case which is likely 526.6, 582.5 and 485.1, 449.5 respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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