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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is admittedly true that
work
 has an inseparable part of human life.
Although
 some individuals claim that volunteer
work
 should be
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mandatory
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 would be part of high school events.I firmly agree with that notion
due to
 several factors that
i
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 will discuss in greater detail in my essay. To commence with, there
are
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deluge
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 of
argument
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ls
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 in
favor
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 of my stance.The most preponderant
one
 is that volunteer
work
 cannot only contribute to
social
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,
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but
also
 lead to numerous other benefits in various fields.
Such
 as,
while
 working for a charity,
one
 can learn to care for
other
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others
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 and value
things
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 he
prossesses
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possesses
processes
.Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers,
masses
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 can enhance the productivity and quality of their lives, with much ease, efficacy and convenience Needless to say, all these merits stand
one
 in good stead, as far as augmenting their chances of excellence and prosperity is concerned.
Furthermore
, another pivotal aspect of the aforementioned propositions is that it is only likely to help
one
 excel and thrive in varied areas.
Besides
, only students
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follows
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such
 a system,
they
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can prosper in their life and they will be
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a success
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success
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 in many
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For instance
, the study results published by the government of Australia in April 2014 and May 2016 clearly indicate that volunteer
work
 Is very crucial and critical.
Hence
, it is apparent why many are
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favor
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 of
this
view point
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. In conclusion, after analyzing the subject in detail, I would like to highlight that
although
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unpaid community services in high school programmes can teach vital aspects of humanity to a child.
Nevertheless
, I am convinced that the charitable task should be done only voluntarily, so that youngsters may enjoy
such
 kind of
work
 and improve their abilities.
Submitted by Jahid Hossain on

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