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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is admittedly true that
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 has an inseparable part of human life.
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 some individuals claim that volunteer
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 should be
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mandatory
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 would be part of high school events.I firmly agree with that notion
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 several factors that
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 will discuss in greater detail in my essay. To commence with, there
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 of
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 of my stance.The most preponderant
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 is that volunteer
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 cannot only contribute to
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,
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but
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 lead to numerous other benefits in various fields.
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 as,
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 working for a charity,
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 can learn to care for
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 and value
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the things
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 he
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possesses
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.Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers,
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 can enhance the productivity and quality of their lives, with much ease, efficacy and convenience Needless to say, all these merits stand
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 in good stead, as far as augmenting their chances of excellence and prosperity is concerned.
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, another pivotal aspect of the aforementioned propositions is that it is only likely to help
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 excel and thrive in varied areas.
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, only students
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follows
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such
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 a system,
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can prosper in their life and they will be
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a success
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success
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 in many
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, the study results published by the government of Australia in April 2014 and May 2016 clearly indicate that volunteer
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 Is very crucial and critical.
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, it is apparent why many are
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favor
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 of
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view point
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. In conclusion, after analyzing the subject in detail, I would like to highlight that
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although
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unpaid community services in high school programmes can teach vital aspects of humanity to a child.
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, I am convinced that the charitable task should be done only voluntarily, so that youngsters may enjoy
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 kind of
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 and improve their abilities.
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