The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Electricity
is a vital energy source in the world nowadays. Every country
used electricity
for
various purposes (industrial and everyday life). Based on top
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the country
a country
country
that Fix the agreement mistake
countries
produce
and consumer Change the verb form
produces
electricity
, China and United State
are two countries that produce Fix the agreement mistake
States
largest
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the largest
electricity
as well as
largest
consumers. Correct article usage
the largest
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Almost
country
producing Add an article
the country
electricity
more than
consuming. German is one
and only Correct article usage
the one
country
based on table
above that consume more
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the table
electricity
than it produces.Submitted by rizalestari on
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