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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Electricity
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 is a vital energy source in the world nowadays. Every
country
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 used
electricity
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 for various purposes (industrial and everyday life). Based on
top
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the top
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 10
rank
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 of
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the country
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country
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countries
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 that
produce
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 and consumer
electricity
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, China and United
State
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States
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 are two countries that produce
largest
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the largest
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electricity
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as well as
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largest
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the largest
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 consumers.
Allmost
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Almost
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country
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the country
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 producing
electricity
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 more than consuming. German is
one
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the one
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 and only
country
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 based on
table
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 above that consume more
electricity
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 than it produces.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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