The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Electricity
is a vital energy source in the world nowadays. Every
country
used
electricity
for various purposes (industrial and everyday life). Based on
top
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10
rank
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of
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the country
a country
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country
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countries
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that
produce
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and consumer
electricity
, China and United
State
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States
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are two countries that produce
largest
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the largest
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electricity
as well as
largest
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the largest
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consumers.
Allmost
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Almost
all of
country
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the country
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producing
electricity
more than consuming. German is
one
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the one
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and only
country
based on
table
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the table
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above that consume more
electricity
than it produces.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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