Many countries are experience in population growth and need more home. Should these new home be constructed in existing cities or should new town be built in the countryside?

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vital and it is a basic need of the growing human
population
. A recent survey published by the Government of India states that
cities
are congested
due to
the migration of people from rural to urban
hence
it is a good thought to build houses in the
countryside
. In
this
essay, I will describe
pros
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and cons of building houses in the existing
cities
vs in the
countryside
.
Firstly
, all the metro
cities
are heavily populated as
the
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more economic resources are situated near these towns, More over major huge companies and industries are
also
located in these towns and over the few years it is well noted that human populations are migrating towards these
cities
.
Due to
the fact, these
cities
are heavily populated , even
the
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small portion of the land is
also
used leaving no space for the
on coming
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population
. Building
the
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house in
the
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cities
nowadays
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more
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costlier
then
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building in rural areas.
Secondly
, the Development of the country is not only based on the rural areas
,
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it is
also
the progress of the urban areas,
hence
I strongly believe in order to develop the
countryside
it is an
oppertunity
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opportunity
to build living spaces for expanding
population
, as the
population
increased in the urban area local business
such
as vegetable,fruits
vendares
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vendors
demand will increase
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boosting countries economy and
also
there
are
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high possibility of receiving fresh vegetables from the nearby farms.
To conclude
, new
housed
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to
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be constructed in the new towns which
is
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to be built in the
countryside
.
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