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The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrated information on ten nations for the production and consumption of
electricity
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 in the year 2014.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that
China
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was
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consumed and
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 produced the most
while
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 Korea at the least on the chart in consuming and producing
electricity
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. For the production category,
China
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 ranks first with almost 5,400
kwh
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, America was the
second,
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countries
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 produced about 4,100
kWh
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, next up was Russia, Japan, India and Canada, it is obvious that those are
countries
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 with large populations, so the amount of
electricity
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 need to produced was massive. France, Brazil and Germany had approximately in
kwh
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 with 561.2, 530.7 and 526.6. The
last
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 rank belongs to Korea which produced only 485.1
kWh
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 of
electricity
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 in the year. In the consumption category,
China
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 still ranks first with 5,322
kWh
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,
this
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 show that
China
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's consumption was very high, far from the other
countries
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 by a large distance, Followed up was America for almost 4000
kwh
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, next was Russia with 1,038
kWh
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, Japan with 856,7
kWh
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, and India with 698,8
kWh
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. Surprisingly, despite the fact that Germany has low production of
electricity
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, they consumed
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electricity
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 more than the amount they produced. Those 4
countries
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 Canada, France, Brazil and Korea had nearly figures with no less than 400
kWh
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, no more than 500
kWh
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, china, kwh, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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