The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart illustrated information on ten nations for the production and consumption of
electricity
in the year 2014.
Overall
, it is noticeable that
China
was
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consumed and
also
produced the most
while
Korea at the least on the chart in consuming and producing
electricity
. For the production category,
China
ranks first with almost 5,400
kwh
, America was the
second,
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countries
produced about 4,100
kWh
, next up was Russia, Japan, India and Canada, it is obvious that those are
countries
with large populations, so the amount of
electricity
need to produced was massive. France, Brazil and Germany had approximately in
kwh
with 561.2, 530.7 and 526.6. The
last
rank belongs to Korea which produced only 485.1
kWh
of
electricity
in the year. In the consumption category,
China
still ranks first with 5,322
kWh
,
this
show that
China
's consumption was very high, far from the other
countries
by a large distance, Followed up was America for almost 4000
kwh
, next was Russia with 1,038
kWh
, Japan with 856,7
kWh
, and India with 698,8
kWh
. Surprisingly, despite the fact that Germany has low production of
electricity
, they consumed
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electricity
more than the amount they produced. Those 4
countries
Canada, France, Brazil and Korea had nearly figures with no less than 400
kWh
, no more than 500
kWh
.
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