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Many countries plan to ban the sale of petrol and diesel cars in the future, with governments planning to support the use of electric vehicles. Do the advantages of electric vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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As the world population keeps increasing, demand for vehicles is
also
 increasing at the same time human transportation causing severe air pollution, emitting carbon-monoxide causing
damage
 to the ozone layer
hence
 it is a good start by the government to stop the sale of petrol and diesel
cars
 and support to use the electrical vehicles which are eco-friendly, causing no harm to our environment. On the one hand, In many developing countries the majority of the population are middle or average-income people,
this
 class of people is able to afford petrol and diesel
cars
 as the cost of these
cars
 is not expensive compared with even the basic model of electric
cars
. Maintenance of these
cars
 are
also
 not expensive and major service centers are located in almost all the location of the country.
However
, despite many advantages these
cars
 are causing
damage
 to our ecosystem, causing heavy pollution
on
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 the environment. Smoke from these
cars
 emits various toxic gases leading to
the
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damage
 to the ozone layer and damaging greener trees.If we continue to
damage
 our ecosystem through petrol and diesel
cars
then
 our beautiful earth will be inhospitable for human survival.
On the other hand
, Electric
cars
 are expensive , with a higher maintenance cost, charging stations across the countries are not developed very well and the government commenced all the efforts to fill the void in using these
cars
, Despite all cons these
cars
 are eco friendly and do not cause damages to the environment and even these
cars
 do not emit dangerous smoke.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that despite several challenges with electric
cars
 it is advantages outweigh the disadvantages
hence
 the usage of electric
cars
 is a more sound option.
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