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Compare the town of Brindell and local areas in 1800, 1900 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The three maps illustrate the major alterations that
Brindell
 and its neighbouring areas underwent over two centuries from 1800-2000. In 1800, the whole district was largely separated by River Stour, which can be seen in the centre of the layout.
Brindell
 was situated in the
south west
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 end of the river. There were two agricultural zones near
Brindell
 – one to the north was for growing crops and the one to the east was for animals to graze. At
northeast
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the northeast
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 end of the river was an
area
 of woodland. The district witnessed several changes in 1900. Noticeably, the entire grazing
area
 was converted. The upper part of
grazing
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area
 was substituted by an industrial zone. A village called Bun Hill was constructed in the lower part for workers. In 2000, many more changes were observed.
Brindell
 expanded and became almost double in size. The farmland for crops shrunk because of the construction of Bun Hill Park. Bun Hill
also
 grew in size and many more industries were opened towards the east of the village.
Overall
,
Brindell
 transformed itself from an
agricultural based
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 town to an
area
 with versatile functions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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