Evaluate the following essay according to IELTS band descriptors for writing task 1 and extract all mistakes "essay" "the graph gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with, predictions for 2030 and 2040 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant"

The line chart illustrates the proportion of people living in

cities

in

Philippines

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the Philippines

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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020. The graph

also

provides expectations of the population after 20 years.

Overall

, from 1970 to 1990, there was a gradual climb in citizens of the

cities

,

whereas

after

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2 decades, there was almost a slight steadiness.

However

, from 2020 onwards, the

cities

will be witnessing a dramatical in the population. The Indonesian and Malaysian indicators show that the residents of the

cities

are always in

moderate

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a moderate

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increase of nearly 7% to 10% every 10 years. In 1970, Indonesian

cities

’ population were above 10%,

meanwhile

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in 2020, it has

been

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risen by 40% and it’s predicted to be nearly 61%. With the same token, Malaysian people living in

cities

grew up by 50% and will be reaching

the

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peak in 2040 constituting around 83%.

On the other hand

, the other 2

countries

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countries'

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charts were fluctuating.

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The Philippines

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Philippines

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Philippines'

Philippine's

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percentage increased till 1990

then

slowly decreased until 2010 but is going to rise again till 2040.

Also

, Thai

cities

passed through periods of wave,

then

plateaued and will reach the highest percentage in 2040 (nearly 42%).