The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates how many guests in different
age
groups in The UK spend their money in three categories (Food and drinks, restaurants and hotels, and Entertainment) during 2004.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that food and drinks experienced an upward trend during the period in question,
while
restaurants and
hotel
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were the least sector people spend their money on in all
age
groups and it showed down ward trend during 2004. Regarding the provided details, in 2004, youth's foodstuff and hotel expenditure accounted for 5%.
then
it saw a significant increase between people from 31 to 45 and
this
expenditure increased to around 7%. after that, foodstuff and drink spending saw a steady growth until it reach its peak for elders who
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bigger than 76 years folk by 23%. In ,contrast folk who enjoy spending their money on entertainment there was a similar rate from the
age
of 30 until 45 and presented by 6%.
then
this
spen increased slightly for the
age
category from 40 to 60 years and it rose around one of twenty. and old folk from 61 feed expenditure and those from 76 and more spent on entertainment and food was equal.
Furthermore
, people from 61 to 75 restaurant and hotel spends were bottom of the list and accounted for less than 2%.
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