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10.Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is true that some feel that all tertiary
students
 should choose curriculums
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 on their interests,
while
 others believe that they should only
focus
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subjects
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 to their future career. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I tend to agree with the latter. I concede that there are several benefits to solely focusing on
job related
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subjects
such
 as computer science and cutting-edge technology, and perhaps the most obvious one is that they can provide
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better career
prospect
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 for graduates. When people
delicate
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 their time to studying job-related
subjects
, they tend to be more
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 and become
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 in
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, in turn making them more competitive in a fast-paced world. What
this
 does is make it absolutely beneficial.
For example
, my niece Lily, who is a medicine student
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 Zhongshan University in China, has devoted all her time to medical
subjects
, allowing her to depart from other
students
 in her school, and
this
 ultimately leads to a position of a doctor in a prestigious hospital in her town.
However
, I firmly believe that
students
 should be given the
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 to learn what they
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genuine
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 interested in. One reason is that not everyone knows what they would like to be in the time of university education. Many young people in China,
for instance
,
they
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start to decide
their
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career
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 even after
their
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graduations
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. As
such
, it is hard for them to just
focus
 on a major subject, which means they may well be
education
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 in a more comprehensive way. Another compelling reason is that it is hard to predict the future of job markets
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 with the advancement of artificial intelligence. If university student only
focus
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 on learning specific
subjects
 that
related
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 to
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 employment market, they may well be heavily
effected
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 by AI as AI can take over their roles in certain ways
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 is extremely detrimental. In conclusion,
while
 there are some advantages of learning
the
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job-related
subjects
 as a priority for tertiary
students
, I strongly believe they should be allowed to choose
subjects
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 on their passion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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