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The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided presentation of the human-made process illustrates the method of manufacturing,transforming
clay
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 into brick for the assembly service.
Overall
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it is clear that
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this
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 linear process takes 5 main stages,beginning with the excavation process of
clay
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 by using a digger and finishing with the transporting of delivery service.
Firstly
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, the
clay
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 is dug up from the ground with a digger and after that, it is filtered into tiny pieces through the metal grid with the assistance of a roller.After that, filtrated
clay
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 is combined with water and sand,
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 it can be easy to stereotype.
Following
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this
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,
bricks
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 ought to be shaped by using a mould.
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,they must be stored in a drying oven for 1-2 days and after that,all
bricks
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 are put into a cooling chamber for 2-3 days,by placing them into the kiln,at various degrees of temperature,moderate between 200 and 980 and high, which is 870-1300 degrees respectively.
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,manufactured
bricks
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 are bundled into cubic form before these
bricks
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 are delivered to the building industry by a special transport delivery service.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words clay, bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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